1. The background discusses many phenomena so that a brief theoretical review of each variable relationship needs to be completed to build a logic of research opportunities and the limitations of existing research (whose research) 
2. To ensure that this research is novelty, show / review the gaps from the literature review regarding the model developed. State gaps explicitly, accompanied by research that has been reviewed. 
3.Some of the discussions in building hypotheses need to be clarified again, especially in moderation expectations (more clearly about strengthen / weaken the relationship between variables) 
4 The discussion of each of the findings needs to be clarified conceptually 
5. The limitations of this research can be explored again (not only from the methodological aspect) so as to provide direction for future research